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28 March 2006

Speaking Distance

I.

Anna said she was getting married
Her hair was longer and the pudgyness was gone

That’s why no one
Went out with her before

Funny how I remembered her name
And recognized her in the dark

I said good bye knowing I’d never see her again
She probably doesn’t think about it

II.

I don’t want to live in my home town
Too many other people do

My life is weather for a dream

2 Comments:

Blogger ilightyouup said...

Rewrite that without using pronouns... You might surprise yourself.

JB

3/29/2006 1:23 AM  
Blogger ilightyouup said...

you wrote:

"I don’t want to live in my home town
Too many other people do

My life is weather for a dream."

That is poetry, McD. Just reading back through your old work while i wait for the mason to finish my new chimbley :-)

RGS

4/06/2006 1:32 PM  

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